實(shí)例解析中考英語(yǔ)作文給分原則(4)

　　又有家長(zhǎng)呼吁上點(diǎn)學(xué)生習(xí)作，于是來(lái)一篇之前我的學(xué)生LYQ寫的作文。

　　Nowadays, the lunch in school is not as popular as it used to. Some students don’t like it so they go out of the school in order to eat the food they prefer. However, not all delicious food is good for their health.

　　I would like to present my ideas as follows. There is no denying that students ought to follow the school rules to have lunch at school, which can not only keep themselves healthier but also make it easier for the teachers to manage the students. But on the other hand, it is the responsibility of the schools to improve the qualities of their dishes. Only in this way can they attract more students to have lunch at school.

　　【實(shí)際得分：17分】

　　張老師點(diǎn)評(píng)：

　　這是我以前一個(gè)學(xué)生的習(xí)作，當(dāng)時(shí)的題目如下：

　　現(xiàn)在，有很多同學(xué)選擇在學(xué)校外面吃午飯。這樣做是否正確?你的建議是什么?請(qǐng)寫一篇不少于60字的文章。

　　老實(shí)講，其實(shí)這篇文章是可以得滿分的，但是由于是習(xí)作，我強(qiáng)行扣掉了1分。這篇文章從文采來(lái)講，當(dāng)然是很好的，但是其實(shí)其中很多句型，在很多文章中都可以通用，只要提前熟悉，要寫出來(lái)其實(shí)并不困難。例如文章中出現(xiàn)的”I would like to present my ideas as follows.” “There is no denying that…” “only in this way + 倒裝句”等等，都是我們平時(shí)操練過(guò)的。所以很多事情你看起來(lái)很困難，但是對(duì)于有準(zhǔn)備的人來(lái)說(shuō)也是比較輕松的。正如賈島詩(shī)言：“二句三年得，一吟雙淚流。”
 

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